Painting with Brush Strokes

I did not do a revision because I wanted the blog to be concise so instead I already made the changes in the blog. Most of this is original except for the adjective out of order. This is an excerpt from a blog of one of my other classes. I was discussing the history of the globalization of education and these are the first two paragraphs.


The first form of education was through survival skills and adaptation. HUMANS EVOLVING,KNOWLEDGE EXPANDING,(absolute) the human race PROGRESSED AND ORGANIZED SCHOOLS WERE INTRODUCED (past transitive), first by religious association and then with public schools. Predominantly during this time teachers were female and the class sizes were small,INTIMATE AND PLAIN (adjectives out of order). Classes covered the basic topics like math, history, language, and grammar. As education grew in importance an organized system was established. This establishment is how the globalization of education began. Through the years education has become globalized by online courses, government and business management, and standardization.


Organizations of education are operated under a nation-state that “controls, regulates, coordinates, mandates, finances, and certifies,” (Nicholas, Carlos, Globalization and Education) the process of learning. These organizations invoke a policy of conformity and identification with the nation state. Having a government run system came about with economic restructuring throughout history. A world trend of economic changes can be classified into several factors. THE FIRST PHASE OF THIS CHANGE: THE GLOBALIZATION OF LABOR AND A NATIONAL ECONOMY (appositive). The next phase is the ARRANGEMENT OF CLASSES (present transitive) and social structure within individual countries and the EXPANSION OF NATIONAL TRADE (present transitive) and world market. Having more trade meant there was a need for an increased workforce and a restructuring of the labor market. RESTRUCTURING THE LABOR MARKET (present participle), a change in labor workers and a new concept of a “team” effort arose. Continual changes in the work force occurred throughout the years but soon economic downfall would ensue around the world and result in the reduction of budgets. This encouraged the privatization of social services like education. Privatization comes with the need for control leading to government involvement and the establishment of policies.


I hope these are right but I might have my transitive examples wrong. They were the ones that I got stuck on most.